Redaction of anecdote
One day I'm stay in house of my favourite friend when I'm little, she's Thaïs. We're play in her bedroom and I have thirst because I had been extremly tired. I quickly for drink water but I unfortunately went faster and the water made me choke could barelybreathe. My mum was really afraid because I can't speak because I were very nervous, but fotunetly after everybody were happier becasuse it was just a scare.
Hi Alba,
ResponderEliminarVery weak. You need to improve your grammar and vocabulary. Final mark: 4